I am a mask,
I change in an instance to fit with my surroundings at times
Though most times I like to stick out
I can cheer you up and make you laugh with my funny faces
I can be simple and easy going
Though I can also be formal and professional like a masquerade mask
I can sometimes look one way but feel another
I almost always have a smile plastered on my face like a clown mask
I AM A MASK!
chad This poem that you wrote is very expressing, this is very good. your giving me me feelings and your explainig why you are a mask and how almost always have a smile plastered on your face good choice word. i think a mask does describe you because of how you explain it in your poem. good job chad!
ReplyDeleteHey chad.
ReplyDeleteI really like the poem. It really does describe your personality! "I can cheer you up and make you laugh with my funny faces" is a really good metaphor. I'm actually shocked how well your poem describes you. Very good job! :)
Your word choice was excellent. Overall, good job ! :D
Hi Chad,
ReplyDeleteLike your teammates, I enjoyed the poem.
They left out something important in the requirements, though, when they commented. The poem must be at least 12 lines long.
I make that requirement because I want students to develop their metaphors fully.
In think you can actually add 4-5 lines to this...
After each of the "I can..." lines include a line that describes what that is like in your life...like in what situations do you like to fit in to the surroundings? when are you formal, like a masquerade? etc.
I think the addition of these details will give your poem more depth and help it to describe you better.
mrs s